Im fuckin morbid ... morbid i say

[Ragga_Wh0re]

far beyond sight
there she sits
perfect
preening specimen
eyes dark as night
rain soaked auburn curls
soft pink lips
face full of worry
hush ur fury
can u hear her cry?
poor preening specimen
her soul dies
far beyond sight
there she sat
perfect
preening specimen
eyes once dark as night
blood soaked auburn curls
soft purple lips
face full of death
hush shes left
can u hear her go?
poor preening specimen

[stabmyhead]

Ahh.. nothing like self proclaimed labels. :) OMG! You said the word blood in it, or dies! DIES!! Let's not forget the words CRY and DARK!!! Did I mention DIES??? My fucken' god that was some morbid shit. I don't know if I could go to sleep tonight, that was some really fucken' morbid shit!! Sounds like the typical grade 8 poetry you would find on live journal communities for the tortured, "morbid/dark" middle class suburban goth child that shops at hot topic. Woe is me......

I'M A FUCKEN' ROCK STAR!!! It must be true if I say it is.

[Ragga_Wh0re]

stab my rice with a fork u god damned wanger i dont see u posting any of ur poetry? dont sit there and critique mine if i cannot critique urs. FYI I am not goth i am actually very far from being goth and grade 8 poetry i beg to differ dear. u just cant handle the fact my poetry is better than urs... and until u have proof that ur poetry in fact is better than mine... then my poetry always will be better than urs.

So lil miss stabby the great I have come to the conclusion that U suck

[Ragga_Wh0re]

I see ur always so quick to throw character judgements on various people. Have u tried evaluating urself?

Quit trying to put up the front that ur shit doesnt stink cuz Im pretty damned sure it does. No ones perfect hunny remember that.

[bob]

i'd gladly post thousands of stabby's poems if she let me... i, and probably 100 other people will vouch that her creative abilities are far beyond yours... there are a number of her poems floating around this site if you care to look for them. i'm pretty sure she's not going to stoop to your level and try to compare herself to you, obviously that's a waste of time on her part.

i'm pretty sure she won't deny that her shit stinks. she probably takes great pride in the smell of her feces.

and i think it's pretty easy to throw character judgements at you because you're trying to stuff your character in our face. you ask for it, you get it, now STFU, put it in a shoebox, write your life story on a t-shirt and jump off a bridge.

BTW were u downtown yesterday? i got a phonecall from someone saying they saw you, and boy did i get a mouthful from them, ahaha...

[Ragga_Wh0re]

no im not trying to shuv my character in ur face? how the hell do u figure just because i say things u dont wanna hear? and plz i really would like to read one of her poems... i think i read a poem about abortion and i wsnt blown away by it. If that was her poem she is to straight forward in her writing she does not leave room for the person 2 think. and yeah as a matter of fact I was down town yesterday and thats nice im glad u heard a mouthful! if u think this severly affects me think again. There u feeble minded morons go with ur grade school tactics again...*yawn* thats creepy people see me I dont see them...I wonder if the person who saw me was sumone who I infact do despise which is the majority of u abortion bucket escapees... hawt dang i`m thinkin if it was sumone who i despised... they didnt have the balls to talk smack to my to my face...GO FIGURE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[bob]

so... creating a topic that says "Im fuckin morbid ... morbid i say", is not trying to shove your character in our face?

wow

[Ragga_Wh0re]

dude the morbid part is for my writing dumbass think about it im not saying im morbid just my writing is. If u would look at any of my other poems i posted on here u wuld see they r all pretty dark and creepy and morbid.

and grrr@u for changing my damned posts but hey its amusing so kudos!

[stabmyhead]

Ohh.... spooky. You wrote "Im fuckin morbid ... morbid i say" Not, "my poetry is morbid ... morbid i say". About the whole part of saying things we don't want to hear.... HAHAHAHAHAHA... I'm sure Bob has read many of things on here or on cereal boxes that the public or whoever 'doesn't want to hear', you're giving yourself wayyy too much credit.

About my abortion poem, now how did that one escape the deleting? Hmmm.... that's one of my poems you've read out of the hundred or so I have, it was meant to be direct in a sort of amusing Dr.Seuss-ish way, you know, not all poetry is MYSTERIOUS and SPOOKY like what you write (snicker)

I'm not going to post any of my poetry on here, in fact, I've deleted most my poetry on here (I think all?), posting poetry online (IMO) is just a waste of time, LOOK AT ME, I'M SO POETIC AND DEEP because I can make lines rhyme together! WOO! Poetry (IMO) is better kept private, for the writer's viewing eyes only, or for the person that they are writing it for, if you choose to broadcast it, it almost loses it's meaning, importance, enigma and beauty because it's been 'tainted' by leaving the writer's viewing and branching out onto others. You can go on believing that I'm doing this because I fear your "creative genius", it makes it more amusing for me actually. I don't have a problem with people posting poetry, but when you post it and act all pretentious and ignorant about it, then you need to come off your pedestal.

Oh and I've lived with Bob before and trust me, he knows my shit stinks, and he knows his poetry shit too, you've got nothing! NOTHING!!! SO GET OVER YOURSELF!

[zarlon]

I highly suggest you listen to stabby as she knows what she's talking about..

Same goes for bob here.

"dark and creepy and morbid. "

Oooh.. You're making quite the statement, aren't you?

Keep it up, champ!

[Ragga_Wh0re]

there people go assume shit again assume away

so stabby r u saying that poets that get published thier writing loses meaning? I enjoy sharing my poetry with people and my poetry does not lose its meaning when I share it. When i share it.. i feel good i dont feel so dreary anymore.
Ur a bitter cunt and i think u need to go talk 2 a therapist.
I need to ge over myself? are u saying I am self centered? how have I made this apparent? I have not. There u go throwing character judgements on people. Quit analyzing others so much and seriously sit down and anyalze urself. The grass isnt always greener on the other side. But debating with u is like telling a 4 yr old child no... so ill just ignore ur bullshit posts from here on out.

and zarlon who was saying i was trying to make a statement? NEWS FLASH!!! Im not. my poetry is my feelings... are u saying im wrong for having these feelings? ur bullshit .

stay the fuck out of my posts u negative cunting whores

[bob]

Originally posted by ~*goddessa*~:
so stabby r u saying that poets that get published thier writing loses meaning? I enjoy sharing my poetry with people and my poetry does not lose its meaning when I share it. When i share it.. i feel good i dont feel so dreary anymore.

i think she means that if you write poems simply for everyone to read them, then you're just a cry for attention and your poems mean nothing more than a plee.

and how can you say you're not self centered when you put "the 1 u luv 2 hate" in your profile? i don't love you or hate you, so get over yourself.

[stabmyhead]

Thank you but my analyzation of myself is private and only for me to view, not a therapist and sure as hell not the rest of the online community. NEWS FLASH: If I analyze other people so much, it's pretty aparent that I do the same to myself.

I remember something Bob used to have on his ICQ info: "An inferior poet writes poems" and to this day it still strikes me.

You come on here and you try so hard to stir shit up, you have "the 1 u luv 2 hate" as your title, your self proclaimed labels are getting the better of you. No body hates you, get over it. You look/act and talk as if you fell off the stereotypical Surrey kid tree and hit every branch down! You are trying too hard. Ease up a bit, there's no one here to impress with the "Look at me I'm so different from you, I'm so unique!" attitude. NO, you are not, I'm sorry but you're unique, JUST LIKE EVERYONE ELSE. In the words of Trevor Goodchild (Aeon Flux), "Humans are not so unique, just a random arrangement of amino acids." So stop fronting like you're something special with your "CONTROVERSIAL" poetry. Stop labelling yourself and people might do the same towards you.

[bob]

Originally posted by stabmyhead:
"An inferior poet writes poems"

wow u still remember that? i can't write anymore because of that damn line :(

[stabmyhead]

That's just something you have to deal with when you post online, everything you write becomes ripped apart and picked at by other people and they form their own judgements on it.

I will critique your poem right now in fact:

The idea is kinda nice, but overused, you are going to have to try to make it better with a strong structure, or abstract is nice too, but it just doesn't sound right at parts. Increase vocabulary usage would give it a few quirks, and make the poem that much more interesting. However, structure wise, this one is better than the 7889 or whatever one.

I am quite aware that poetry is written for yourself and that my opinions on it shouldn't matter but you posted it and I felt the need to critique it, infact, I'm going to go critique any poem that comes on here from now on. Thank you.

[Ragga_Wh0re]

okay and how do u get the whole "lookie me im so different from u bla bla bla" how do u figure?I dont try hard 2 stir shit up it just comes naturally sorry if u retards take the bait hook line&sinker every damned time.And who r u to put any labels for where people live> I WAS BORN IN MSA GENERAL HOSPITAL IN ABBOTSFORD I SPENT 17 AND 3 QUARTER YRS OF MY LIFE LIVING IN ABBOTSFORD I FELL FROM THE STEREOTYPICAL ABBOTSFORD TREE AND HIT EVERY STEREOTYPICAL ABBOTSFORD BRANCH ON MY WAY DOWN. I AM ABBISTANIAN 4 LIFE!and hunny when have I ever labelled myself? I dont say hi im a junglist or hey im a cani kid plur ok! or hey im a goth or hey etc...so yah like i stated b4 ur justa buncha bullshit and I think u like to hear urself talk or see ur self talk or whatever omg im using U in instead of you does this suddenly make me a pop culture twinkie with sticky revolving caps as ud say? OMG I DID IT AGAIN!

Fack aff!!

[stabmyhead]

GET IT RIGHT, IT'S OPPS I DID IT AGAIN!

And who r u to put any labels for where people live>
I'm the mother fuckin' god of everything, I'm jesus in drag, I do as I please. Praise me!

I'm sorry I'm not the "real" thing like you, I'll try to post more of my crappy poetry on here more often, maybe then, people will think I'm deep and philosophical. Thanks.

I don't see anyone else commenting on your poetry though :(

[Ragga_Wh0re]

I do go check my other poetry post fuck head

[zarlon]

Originally posted by stabmyhead:
I'm the mother fuckin' god of everything, I'm jesus in drag, I do as I please. Praise me!

:)

[Ragga_Wh0re]

if ur jesus in drag id love to crusify u to steal then stick ur body in a vat of acid

[stabmyhead]

Originally posted by ~*goddessa*~:
if ur jesus in drag id love to crusify u to steal then stick ur body in a vat of acid

You can't spell Goddessa without GOD. Don't be such an anti-christ.

[zarlon]

Oh the hypocrisy!

[Ragga_Wh0re]

im not an anti christ i just like to say vat of acid and crusify... it makes me feel so deep and philosophical... i hope people will think this of me

and very good observation stabby ur right u cant spell goddessa with out god :kam: