***new poem***

[Breezy]

Waves
A wall
Wearing thin
Weakened by the crashing waves
Of emotion
A pain so great
It rocks the heavens
Tearing deeply
Burrowing inside
Clawing its way in
And clutching at my soul
It hurts
Every stolen glance
And memory
Burns brightly
In my mind
Bring in
Flashes of light
Harsh and blinding
With every image and sound
Bringing me to my knees
Makes me scream
Silent and desperate
The wall wore down
Let the waves in
Crash through
An ocean of water on tears~*

~breezy

[starburst]

thats really good!
i lke the part when you said
"bringing me to my knees
Makes me scream
Silent and desperate"...and from there on...
the metaphors you use are perfect...:054:

cheer up though....
if you ever need to get anything off your chest.....my icq# 122748467
i'm a good listener.....and i may be able to give some advice...:Star:

[starsprite]

Wow....another really nice poem Bry. I promise as soon as I write some i'll show you!!! :027: *hugs*