Dec 08, 03
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your stellar
i could sit for hours upon hours
and just listen to you speak your words,your voice your essence makes me weak so astonished, so amazed id lost all hope, but gained it all back within a single gaze your stellar and im a product of mediocrity please dont stop, i cowar before you i need you right now just to hear you speak ...your voice...your words your mind, beautiful mind be mine beautiful mine, your stellar. 
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Dec 09, 03
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this is alright. the whole 'fallen head over fuckin heals' impression was ingrained after the second time through.
sorta seems like an 'ima-peice-of-shit-compared-to-thy-god' thing goin on. that's what i got out of it anyway. write on.
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Dec 09, 03
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no its just like i feel so sooooooooooooooooo stumped by this person...awe struck. this has nothing to do with love, just appreciation
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Dec 09, 03
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i hear ya
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Dec 12, 03
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good stuff
like being overcome with someone not sexually just the whole package
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Dec 12, 03
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yeah its just like this dude mentally fucked me sideways 10 ways from china and back like oi!
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Dec 19, 03
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Dec 20, 03
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^yes that was the impression articulated...however poetrys good for that...the author means one thing and then everyone else who reads it thinks its something else:)
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Dec 20, 03
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isn't that the whole point of poetry though, TO articulate what's on your mind to others, to write words on your feelings to raise them forth in others?
this didn't seem like the kind of deep shit peice that would cause what you were going for - the whole "i'm feeling something, but i want them to feel something else" thing it was a mediocre peice to start, stop making excuses and covering your ass. you can do better.
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Dec 20, 03
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 hahahahahahahhahahahahah i dunno if i should take offence to that or take it as a cimpliment :hehe:
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