Apr 30, 04
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abstract
must read all, no skimming ravers!
copied and pasted for a calming mind to follow... a mindless self indulgence of redemption and lost adhessive agression... .smirks. linger upon each breath of a gapping wound... [watching] can you see the blood burning??? i love that smell.... a spike that can pierce the soul, a lost cause of infection that plagues all who contract the illness... [breath] inhalation is always the way of death.... always the victum of luminous colour. she pants quickly, searching for air... *suffication* when does the plastic bag reside and she can gasp for the last intoxication of life that she can breach? [wonder] how easily each flows into the next, each crawling deeper into your mind... *scratching* only my eyes can crumble to the sight of the monsters crackling under my bed... .fascination. my feet brun with pain... my eyes flood with light... my skin melts with ice.... *reaches out* only left are the wandering minds that have been left to starve... [hunger burns] each line you follow with your eyes, absorbing each word into your veins... watching it pump...flow to your brain... .contemplation. can you wait for my poison to infect you, can you sustain all emotions that may conquer your every word, before they reach your lips... can you taste the fear?? *sweating* i love to bite at the pain... to ex foliate in the very salt of life that forms upon your face. it is yummy infatuation is the lonliness that pleads to justice.... *pounding fists* help me escape... "what are you looking at" .shudder. my writting leave you with a 2 word vocabulary... *bored* not fun anymore i want all the lost repulsive thoughts, kenneling down into oblivion... no meaning, no thought,just tendancies... imaginations of wandering minds, never focused upon one thought.. forbidden crisis. 
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May 05, 04
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replace abstract with extremely 'lucid rambling' and you've got yourself something.
i don't understand what you're trying to get across. each line doesn't follow or associate with any other. i'd suggest trying to organize your thoughts a little more before writing. came off as over-dramatic; as if your trying too hard.
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May 05, 04
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^i concur
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