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Old Mar 27, 02
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The Pincer

this is a rough copy, so please forgive me if it sounds a little hoom hrum hasty....

"It's amazing what these things are capable of." The soft voice came from the shadows, charged with a barely contained excitement, cuasing the voice to quiver in anticipation of some unholy delight.
The victim had been gagged, bound, and was suffering from a mild headache. Tied to the chair, with a soft white light emanating from the unseen ceiling, his eyes tried to pierce the shadows ahead, trying to see the bearer of the voice of his unknown captor. Frantically his eyes moved to and fro, trying to discern from the shadows some sort of route of escape. The rough rope around his wrists chafed roughly against his bare arms. A soft chirping from some rodent could be heard from behind.
"So many questions must be running through your mind right now. Who are you? Where am I?" Still the voice came from beyond the light making it seem all tht more horrobile."But most of all..."And here there was a pause as the question, who are you? drifted across the victims mind."But most of all..."again the pause, my God who are you?"What is sooo amazing?" And with that the captor chuckled softly, and stepped into the light.
Garbed in a black cloak with a hood that covered his face, the victim saw his captor. Hands clasped behind his back, making the victim feel fear to the unknown surprise that was there. The chittering of the strange animal behind was becoming louder and incesstant, grating more and more on the already frayed nerves of the victim. A cold sweat burst upon his brow and stains could be seen formin under his plain white shirt.
"Well, am I everything that you expected? heeeheeeheee" It was an insane giggle, still the face was cowled, causing the victim great fear."Well I shall show you what is sooo amazing."This time his voice was hardly even audible."Well perhaps,"Again he spoke in a conversationable tone."know is the wrong word..."A hand fluttered to the top of his hood and itched at some unseen itch, as though he was pondering some unknown question."Perhaps..you will Feel what is soooo amazing."Then with a quick shrug as though it was pointless to voice such a thing."Maybe it's a little of both."
My God!! What is going on? How did I end up here? Is this even real? the victims terror could not be restrained as he fought at his bound limbs. Eyes widening so that only his whites seemed to show, he muttered under his breath trying desperately to speak. Only muffled sounds could be heard, as the mumbling turned to frantic shouts. The sweat stains increased in size bringing the sharp odour of perspiration to his nose. But his efforts to free himself, and cry for help, were in vain...nothing was to save him from his captor.
Stepping carefully the captor seemed to move in some nightmarish fashion. Slowly the captor moved out of the victims sight. What's going on? The victim wanted to shriek out, but only a high squealed grunt reached the hooded ears of the captor. The chittering...now lowered in volumne as the animals master came close, although now he could hear the clicking of small feet on a hard surface, as the little rodent (as the victim could only imagine a sound like that could come from) scurried around, just outside of the pale light.
The cool touch of metal could be felt upon the victims upper arm. A hand with a grip like a vice forced the victims head to look straight, so that he could not swivel his neck round to see what was happening.
"First...."the metal was gone, but was soon replaced and this time there were two sharp pieces just digging into his skin."First I shall give you a taste...."The two pieces dug in deep, not quite enough to break the skin, but enough to make the victim wince in unexpected pain."That's just the taste, my friend. Next I will place a little pressure."Slowly oh so slowly the pressure increased biting and pinching with an excruciating amount of pain..and then slowly, oh so slowly, the pinch began to rotate clockwise. The pain was not so great now, but it still was uncomfortable.
If this is just a taste, then i don't wantt he whole meal! the victim thought to himself.
"you see..." the captors voice was filled with amazement." I can start slowly, " and still the pincer slowly turned the victims skin around becoming unbearable. The victims eyes, wide open before now shut tight, as though he could stop the pain throught that alone."Or I can do it quickly."And with that the captor, who was inching along before, twisted with the speed of a cat attacking a bird. If the gag hadn't of been in place, the room they were inhabiting would have been filled witht hte victims cry."Oh yes...I do like that"
"Or...I can do this" The pincer was gone, but for only a moment. This time they rested on his fingernails. " This is a good one. AAAhhhh I'm glad to see that you don't cut your nails often." and with that the nail was torn out. This time the pain was more than excruciating....Again the animal chittered still staying out of the light, but instead of warily circling the border between Light and Dark, it now paced back and forth, eyes low to the ground shone in the Dark."Don't you see, sooo sorry, Feel how amazing this is?" Then the hidden face was filling his vision as the captor dropped himself intot he lap of his victim.
"I can do sooo much to you right now. And what you must be thinking of at this moment. One minute your Life is fine and grand, with problems that plagued your mind before, now...vanished...poof. Gone. Your old Life nothingbut a dream compared to the reality that has been revealed to you. A reality that i have created and brought to your attention." Rising up the captor flowed into the shadows which enveloped the man totally and completely.
"And there is soooo much more that I can show you. But before the show, I should let you know that i like to hear....heheeehehehe" The creature scurried throught the light. A rat, and a big one. "Oh don't mind Algernon, he's just curious...he always is heehehehehehe." The rat stopped at the victims feet, the whiskers brushing lightly at the victims unclad skin. A little nose sniffed, almost ticklingly, smelt this new comer.

and thats all i have right now...sorry for all the typos but i didnt' feel like hitting the backspace button all the time:) I'lll post the rest of it the next time i get stoned and feel like writing this one.
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Old Mar 27, 02
 
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*ew* that is so dark and creepy
but good =)

:Star:
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Old Mar 27, 02
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*ew* that is so dark and creepy
but good =)

:Star:
yeah it's going to get alot worse too:) the cool part about it is (well what i think is the cool part) there is no real story line, you're not going to find out why the victim is the victim nor who the captor is.
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Old Mar 27, 02
 
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hmmm as long as this is not a true story
then its ok.. :319:

i know you are the captor
dont lie... *runs away*
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Old Mar 27, 02
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hmmm as long as this is not a true story
then its ok.. :319:

i know you are the captor
dont lie... *runs away*
no it's not based on a true story, so yes it is ok
hey want to see something amazing?
maybe see is the wrong word....
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Old Mar 27, 02
 
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sure!
i would like to see/hear/eat something amazing :D:
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Old Mar 27, 02
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sure!
i would like to see/hear/eat something amazing :D:
haha you've got courage i'll give you that.
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Old Mar 27, 02
 
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maybe i should of added "within reason" *L*
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Old Mar 27, 02
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maybe i should of added "within reason" *L*
i've noticed that you keep typing *L* what does that mean¿
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Old Mar 27, 02
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laugh
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Old Mar 27, 02
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that story is nuts! finish it! lol
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Old Mar 27, 02
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ohhh....now i feel like a fucking retard...where's captain obvious when you need him?
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Old Mar 27, 02
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that story is nuts! finish it! lol
in order to finish this remarkable tale (buying time for that thirty second thing) i have to be in the right frame of mind and stoned :)
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Old Mar 30, 02
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That was awesome tim. Do you and Ole still write lots?
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Old Mar 30, 02
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That was awesome tim. Do you and Ole still write lots?
he's actually been doing alot more writing than myself...i wrote that one in joes room after smokinga joint and playing around with his leatherman...the idea just popped in there and i had to get in on paper.....
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Old Mar 31, 02
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it needs more rainbows and lollipops.

plur OK

say yes to crack.
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Old Mar 31, 02
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it needs more rainbows and lollipops.

plur OK

say yes to crack.


rainbows and lollipops and crackheads everywhere!!!
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Old Apr 01, 02
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Leatherman?
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Old Apr 01, 02
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Leatherman?
they're kinda like swiss army knives.
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Old Apr 05, 02
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ok, I know now, cus you showed me, I was thinking of something else, how did you get that out of a swiss army knife?
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Old Apr 05, 02
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ok, I know now, cus you showed me, I was thinking of something else, how did you get that out of a swiss army knife?
what the story? well first off i was stoned...then i used to pliers and pinched some of my skin on my hand right? twisted a bit to see that yes indeed it would make a nice torturing device...then i pulled a little at my finger nail, and i knew right then and there i needed a piece of paper and a pen.
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Old Apr 05, 02
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lol, well thats a good way to start a story
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Old Apr 06, 02
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lol, well thats a good way to start a story
anyway is a good way....
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Old Apr 09, 02
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cool story.
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Old Apr 09, 02
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cool story.
thanks, but i still haven't finished it off yet.
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