Noise

[Heffy]

I decided to post some shit that I wrote, yippee!






Noise;
so much noise;
clouds the mind, blurs the judgment.

Bubbling forth the raucous din of life;
distracting from things you need to hear.

Permeating the very fabric of reason;
until all you hear or feel;
is noise.

Drowning the whispers of your heart;
until nothing more than stifled murmurs.

Seldom can you surmount the static;
the chaotic jumble of thoughts;
and hear what the very essence of your being is saying.

it will never cease;
will always be there to distract;
only when you listen closely, will you see what really matters.



The softly spoken aspirations of your soul.

[Ragga_Wh0re]

good word choice,great build up and the ending was superb.

short and sweet.

[Heffy]

^^ WOW, I was sure you were gonna tear it apart. THanks!

[cutienikki]

Very Nice good job hun!

[C_squared]

Originally Posted by Heffmeister

^^ WOW, I was sure you were gonna tear it apart. THanks!

I'm as shocked as you are.

good one dude.

[Heffy]

^^ Cheers!

[Ragga_Wh0re]

Originally Posted by Heffmeister

^^ WOW, I was sure you were gonna tear it apart. THanks!

if it was complete utter shit I would have,but it wasnt.

when pieces deserve my praises im more then happy to give them,but its rare.

[sidekick]

i say lose the semi-colons. you don't need something at the end of every line...it chops up the sound of your poem, which i don't think works because you're talking about chaos and noise and jumbling, and then you have all these semi-colons breaking everything up.

[Heffy]

^^ i see what you mean.

cheers