Experiment

[Magi]

Colorful white intentions wake sorrowfully.
Colorless green ideas sleep furiously.

Boiling thoughts run red forever.
Freezing actions sit blue never.

Spicy dreams yell blue motions.
Bitter nightmares whisper black intentions.

Salty bland emotions smell technological.
Sour solid notions look inert.

[Magi]

erf

in my drug induced state last night I thought I posted this in the right forum.

It appears I did not.

Anyone with the power please move to Creative Minds.

Thank you.

[nabs]

Delete and repost.

[Ragga_Wh0re]

this reminds me of the garbage i used to write when i was up for 5 days.

*sigh* memories

[Magi]

Originally Posted by ~*goddessa*~

this reminds me of the garbage i used to write when i was up for 5 days.

*sigh* memories

It might seem like garbage, but there is a method to the madness.

See, every line doesn't make sense.

take for instance:

Colorful white intentions wake sorrowfully.

How can something be colorful and white? How can intentions be white? Furthermore, how can intentions wake? I guess someone can wake sorrowfully, but that would be really fucked up.

The second line is better, but that's because I pulled it from somewhere else.

Colorless green ideas sleep furiously.

None of these words connect to any other in the sentence.

It was, quite literally, an experiment in grammar. I was trying to make as many lines as I could, but tired after a while. It just happened to somewhat resemble bad poetry (oh noetry! :p ) as well, so I thought I'd post it here (after a few modifications to the structure).

Anyways, thanks for the input.

[Ragga_Wh0re]

its nonsensical bullshit,honestly.
It does not make me want to think about it,it makes me want to think what the fuck you were on to make you come up with this...this...this,thing?!
But i can see how nothing fits,its like one of those sesame street skits,except bassackwards.
This reminds me of when I did jib.Were you on jib when you wrote this?

[Magi]

Originally Posted by ~*goddessa*~

its nonsensical bullshit,honestly.
It does not make me want to think about it,it makes me want to think what the fuck you were on to make you come up with this...this...this,thing?!
But i can see how nothing fits,its like one of those sesame street skits,except bassackwards.
This reminds me of when I did jib.Were you on jib when you wrote this?

I wasn't on jib, but I wasn't in my usual frame of mind either.

Also, apparently the second line of my "poem" is a really famous line.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Colorle...leep_furiously

derf. More analysis. It seems I wasn't the first one to think of something like this.

[Ragga_Wh0re]

^so you admit to plaguarizim?

[PaIniNyErAnUs]

Originally Posted by ~*goddessa*~

its nonsensical bullshit,honestly.
It does not make me want to think about it,it makes me want to think what the fuck you were on to make you come up with this...this...this,thing?!
But i can see how nothing fits,its like one of those sesame street skits,except bassackwards.
This reminds me of when I did jib.Were you on jib when you wrote this?

goddessa go get back on the pipe, it would help with that thing youcall a stomach...quit bashing him, i think that it was nice,
better then anythign youve ever written
whens the due date?

[nabs]

godessa man, dont say anything unless its constructive. geeze, you only pick on peoples mistakes.

[Magi]

Relax people, I welcome any and all input, this includes positive and negative.

A couple of clarifications:

- I had indicated in my second post that I had gotten the second line from somewhere else. I couldn't remember where, so I was not able to properly reference it at the time.

- I am male (check the little blue guy @ the corner not the avatar :p )

- This was not an assignment for submission, nor was it supposed to be a poem in the first place. I merely rearranged it to make it look more "poetic" (best way to describe it). I was just sitting down and thinking, and I decided to write down what I was thinking. I thought I would post it up here because it seemed interesting and perhaps other people would find it interesting as well. At the very least, I hoped that people would comment on the insane thoughts of a tired student.


I'm glad it has provoked a response, but let's keep it below the belt people. I'm not here to compete, I'm here to contribute.

[Ragga_Wh0re]

Originally Posted by nabs

godessa man, dont say anything unless its constructive. geeze, you only pick on peoples mistakes.

theres no problem with that,its a part of getting feed back.You need to be prepared for negative and positive.Im not going to lie and say its a profound piece of work,i call it like it is.If you have a problem with that then too fucking bad.Put me on ignore,until then shut the fuck up!