another untitled piece.

[sungoo]

Attention all actors
the film of our lives
is a silent one.
Black and white pictures
in so many places
those solemn faces
wear their scars
on their sleeves.
Pain is only as strong
as the cow skin
over your shoulders
or the pigment of your skin.
home brewed animosity
feels as real
as nothing feels
or so they say.

Everyday actors
playing
sado masochist
pseudo masochist
who can tell?
the secrets in the makeup.
razor blade martyrs
carving stigmatas.
a stepping stone
for evolution.
or de-evolution?
god was a shepherd,
and you are his sheep,

Hate, Love
Black, White
the eyes of the world
are not color blind.

- me

[{dC!}]

Very well written ...

I understood it all except :

those solemn faces
wear their scars
on their sleeves.

... ? Could you interpert that for me :)

[junglequeen]

rad
i love how the images flash like an old black and white charlie chaplin film
with blurry edges and flashes

you did well with a sombre topic

[{dC!}]

Definitly agreed ... ^

P.S. Sheena I miss you very very much. I would like to blaze with you some time very soon!

[sidekick]

definitly rad.

i really enjoyed that :)

especially 'the secrets in the makeup"

[{dC!}]

Or "feels as real as nothing feels" ...

[sungoo]

Originally Posted by {DC!}

... ? Could you interpert that for me :)

"those solemn faces
wear their scars
on their sleeves."

It's in reference to people who cut their wrists.
Seeing as if you were to wear a long sleeved shirt, the sleeves come up to their wrists. As well, I guess a play on words, with "wear their hearts on their sleeves" or however it goes.

Thanks to all who replied.
On a side note, any suggestions for a title?

[junglequeen]

suggestion -
A dramatic difference
cuz it reminds me of the two original drama masks
plain white
one happy
one sad
both extreme
:)

[mojo]

i like

you sound upset with the majority of the population

call it anti-lemming

[juice]

i enjoyed reading this :)

i always title my writing with a line from the poem.

for yours.........possibly 'in the makeup' ?

[ty_guy]

nice, very nice. "in the makeup" sounds fitting i've written a free verse poem myself but you use bigger words, i'm not one with an extensive vocabulary but you do have a way to put the vision of your writing in my mind so easily

[lou_belle]

"Under Lights"


Your vision of people as actors...and you can see this. You have essentially brought light to the people on the stage. Being under light also is uncomfortable and puts people on edge.

or you could call it..

"People on the stage"

Most people who feel depressed enough to self mutilate know they are acting...because they obviously feel they can't make it by being themselves. They probably would refer to themselves as actors in life.

[sungoo]

wow, thank you everyone for the consistant feed back. it is very much appreciated. :)