May 17, 06
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If Only...
If only i can tell you
what you mean to me if only i know how you would react to me if only i could feel you touch me one last time before i have to say goodbye and dry these tears i cried. ----------------------------------------------------------------------------- My mind told me to love you my heart didn't want to trust you but since ur gone my feelings are strong and i will never forget you 
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May 18, 06
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if only you could articulate your feelings better.
if only i could get back the 5 seconds it took to read that tripe. if only.
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May 18, 06
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I liked it :)
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May 18, 06
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You must spread some Karma around before giving it to $userinfo [cutienikki] again.
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May 18, 06
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no im not.
when i see something that deserves my praises i have NO problems giving them.That also applys to pieces that are complete utter garbage. how is someone going to learn without honesty?
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May 18, 06
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well then,shes not a writer then.
just some teenaged tart that likes to whine about her teenaged romance that went awry,under the guise of...poetry. what an insult to all writers.
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May 18, 06
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u know what reagga_whore i do take criticism into account and really i honestly don't care what you think however, the fact of the matter is that i acutally took up enough courage to acutally show "my peice of crap" so if you dont like it then don't comment on it...and even though im not a world class "poet" u can't expect everyone's peice to be perfect.....i just started writing and to express myself took a lot for me so why do you take ur comments and go somewhere else...
Thanks Ms.Tarantula, and especially mojo, thanks a lot for sticking up for me... i wasn't expecting anyone to really like it and give me praise for it or for anyone to shoot me down like regga_whore...but the thing is that when i decided to share that...that's what i felt like and im sorry if my feelings bothered people like regga_whore but its a part of me that im trying to improve and even when i write something better, im still gonna look at this and say that I wrote it, even though it is some high school poem, its still MINE and I wrote that.....
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May 18, 06
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your work is a direct reflection of your creativity and ability to articulate your thoughts and feelings with eloquence and passion.
Your feelings dont bother me,the fact that youre content to sell your feelings short and not paint them with brush they were meant to be painted with,does.To be content to use only shades of gray when you have all the colors of the rainbow to work with,bothers me.When people sell themselves short and dont strive for excellence,bothers me.When people settle for mediocrity and can admit to it and be okay with it,bothers me. I dont expect perfection,I expect someone to try...hard.And to see that reflected in thier work. Kudos on having enough courage to post your work,but shame on you for not having enough balls to accept feedback that isnt all sunshine and butterflies.I will take my comments and stay right here.So long as you post things,Im going to comment.And I expect the same.
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May 18, 06
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now that's the kind of feedback i like. i respect ur posts and i respect what ur saying and i do understand about not expressing ur feelings fully and "colourfully" however like i said im just starting out and i have lots to learn...this is only a little pebble in my big pond
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May 18, 06
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good!and keep on fucking giviner and never settle.
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May 19, 06
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First off I would like to say knowing cutienikki , that it was a good piece of writing. Besides thats what writing is , writing dosent contain rules, or any type of boundary. It's people that think it does that dont know the meaning or even how to write, it comes from within the inside. People that critisize only are ignorant and dont know how to express there emotions, Nikki I thought it was awesome and its good to see you writing, it dosent have to be for others to read it can just be for yourself it can also be the healing from if you've had a past shitty relationship, writing some times makes you come to your senses , thats why it is emotion is only because you write from them. And ragga whore first off I cant see why you should contain ragga in your name considering most of ragga songs out there are based on poems ( Bob Marley to be one) , so would you critisize him ohhh I guess not!, he's famous for not only his songs but his poems as well, where cutienikki is now soon will be in the spot of Bob Marley himself all writers must start off somewhere, so maybe you should change your name to ingnorant bitch considering you dont know what it takes to be a writer let alone see any type of talent in it starting.
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May 19, 06
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May 20, 06
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lil_jenna,fuck off.
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May 31, 06
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Hahaha oh man Ragga, I think I'm in love. I've told you this once and I'm about to again.. there needs to be more people like you around. You speak what you think. Not only that, but the diction and sentence structure used in everyday posts shows your level of creativity and intelligence above the rest. Yes, granted, you are very oppinionated, making some people on here think you're a "viscious cunt", but you're always right. As a writer myself I agree with you - cutienikki, its great you have these emotions, but do yourself the respect of presenting them in an insightful and thought-provoking manner. Poetry is not simply rhyming couplets and obscure short sentences. Poetry is the most artistic way out there to present your words and feelings to your audience. Don't sell yourself, your readers, and the art of poetry short.
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May 31, 06
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Seriously uncool. Just because somone apparently hasn't stomped out all your creativity doesn't mean you have to shit on somone else's personal expression. That said. I have read some of your writing and it is pretty good. Also, I plan on putting some of my writing up sometime and would like you to know that unless you have something productive to say. Please refrain from commenting at all. At least the writers that I show my work to (yes, i know writers) give me tips and usefull input. Try surpassing your creative snobbery and help somone if you think their writing is so bad. P.S. I'm sure you arn't really this bitchy in person, so why take it to the forum?
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May 31, 06
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Do myself the respect? I think me showing off my poems to people like you is enough respect for myself. If you did read my previous posts i did say that i am a shy person and yes it's not perfect and this is my first time that i have started writing. And if your such a "writer" as you call urself, u should know that not every peice is gonna be perfect. Some "critic" will come along and find something THEY don't like. Others like my poems, doesn't mean they don't know what poetry is. Poetry and writing shouldn't have a sterotype of "how to write" Its about being free and expressing YOURself however you want to and the way you say your words is the way you feel right there and then. And plus why make everything so complicated when you can just make it simple. I understand more detail to paint more of a picture, but if you can say it YOUR way I find it is much more valuable.
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May 31, 06
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May 31, 06
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haha sorry then "some people" don't act 100% like them acutal selves that they are in real life :PartEkid:
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May 31, 06
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you post your shit,im going to comment.Nice or nasty. Im not bitchy,im assertive and to the point.Blunt if you will.I dont feel the need to sugar coat anything,not for some shmuck online or my best friend in real life. I give the straight goods if you cant appreciate that then go cry into your pillow because Im distinterested in hearing people cry foul because I choose to be honest. Oh and by the way,I expect none the less from others.:)
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May 31, 06
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