Richeyes

[hellzbellz]

what i think of drugs!! :sick:



Down deep in the depth
of soul,
YOU need to Shine.
Those oh soo dirty eyes, :trippin:
Give no Get NO.
Satisfaction can get noooo
Hit that rock COUPLE Ocassion,
you hit my Bottom.
Leads to MY couch,
held Ever so Tight.
No Means to Come home,
Dont you want some body to love.
dont you need somebody to love. :smoke1:
SMARTING up there girl FRIEND.
Bellz is sick of love


that was dedicated to a friend of mine thats down and out as well as me.... and this shit STOPED and i'm done. :284:

you say phyco like its a bad thing :keebler:

i hope you all read and let the hellz figure out if u care. :c-tard:

[hellzbellz]

:moon:

[donkey punch]

i dont get it
i tried
i even re read it a couple of times

[Goat]

Originally posted by donkey punch
i dont get it
i tried
i even re read it a couple of times

illiteracy sucks doesn't it.

[hellzbellz]

welll u must of not read the whole damn thing

[hellzbellz]

i hate it when u pour your soul into something and people say things like that :017:

[hellzbellz]

i got up this morning and watched the newz!!!! and i wrote a poem
here for all the f-n-k'ers


YOU need to pour,
This weather is Nuts Man.
in these eyes you've set me free,
Just like Some People.
BOOOOOOOOOOAHHHHHHHH!!!
OH look i'm gunna OOOOOOOPAHHH,
SoMeWhErE OvEr ThE RaInBoW..............
Way up HIGH,
Theres A LaNd that i've hurd of.
Once IN a LuLaBYE!!!!!!
contiune to love and obey.
I love to pray.
no need for god.....
when theres something
holding ever so strong.
this wont let go
sun is up high :trippin:
as i lay low
written on pay
and now i need to stay
vancouvers sweet
vancouvers fun
but when u get those damn but heads,
that means i'm done.

writen by hellz bellz

[Pussy_Kat]

u are soo fcking cute
and i love u

[donkey punch]

down deep in the depth
you need to.....

those oh soo dirty eyes,
give none
to get some

satisfaction
hitting that rock
on a couple's ocassion

you hit my bottom
this leads to my couch,
held ever so tight

since when does no mean to come home?
dont you want some body to love?
needing somebody
anybody
smarten up girlfriend
oh so sick of love

you say psycho like its a bad thing



I edited it - im sure you wont like it but i edited it none the less
it doesnt gain much more sense but it has less plagerism and candy raver capitalizing

[donkey punch]

Originally posted by hellzbellz


SMARTING up there girl FRIEND.

i like that line best
just not in this context

[Rytalin]

~~~~!@~(&$$%)*!#&$@$@F%@$%U@C@$K!#!@*$!

HuLKSTeR McPLiFFYPLaFF oF THe BeaNSnBaCoN HaMToWN PaRaDe
~~~!~#!#&!@$!$#&~!~~~~~

GeRBLaTcHLY YOU ARE young bellzhellzer.
I think donkey punch is right.

YOU make NO SENSE GIRL FRIEND

:keebler:
:moon: :moon: :moon:

[stringbeans]

WORD

*homeboy stance*

[donkey punch]

did you really pour your soul into it?
if so i am sorry i offended
otherwise it was just random statements that didnt fit together with stolen song lyrics

[Rytalin]

ps
what I think of drugs is that Ms Bellz should take a bit more of em.
[as long as they give you good visuals]

find some form to your randomness, dammit!
:keebler: :cake:

[hellzbellz]

Shakey eyes of Stars/brown
turns my world upside down.
they stand on end... and maybe
i'm comeing to the end?
Mistery upside down
i turned myself Down
Blue skys of misstress
World winds.
YOU help me I help me
GoD darn it kill whats left????
hrmmmm i DONT think so
SO unloved so un-involved
Sence you are worthy 2 b. :p

Helen X

[donkey punch]

yes - what excatly was it that you thought about drugs?


or was that just a prologue?

[donkey punch]

i so want to flame your spelling
but the last one makes a little more sense so ill lay off now
good day - thanks for playing

[hellzbellz]

why thanks... i'm really flabergasted by my work

[Rytalin]

"Sence you are worthy 2 b. "

nice. I like that.

I'd shy away from talking too much in 1st person though.
"I" is a boring old vertical rod.
type your words around it.
:kimmie:

[zarlon]

literature is subjective
what is terrible or wonderful to you may be the complete opposite to the next person
not to say criticism is a bad thing, but as long as the writer is trying their best and putting some form of emotion into it i give props

all about the language skillz, not gonna give up not gonna give up,

-harr

[hellzbellz]

sometimes you need to let go of the past......
like some peeps i know.... they are the haters :finger:

clair that was really nice to come out to see you while back you are awsome and i would really like to play more games. :keebler:

mmmmmm pergs ;)

[hellzbellz]

i've only started to write poetry in the last 2 weeks man

and its a powerfull thing take it for what it means
and let me be

i finally found my path to get to school.
i never made it

[hellzbellz]

drama drama drama queeen hehe!

[Rytalin]

just giving you some pointers :)

[hellzbellz]

i hate it when people try and correct me..... i maybe be inadequate with spelling but i try :p